T1+Writing

__Tuesday 4th April__ __2011__ = = = __WALT - write an argument using persuasive language features to convince people to visit the Bay of Plenty. __ = = = =Success Criteria = =My writing contains an introduction, 3 key arguments and a conclusion = =I will state and restate my opinion = =I use a range of language resources and punctuation = =My paragraphs follow the S E E structure = = = =Dear people who are reading this do you want to go on a holiday were its cheap and not expensive? If so come and check out what The Bay Of Plenty has to offer. Its lovely views from the top of mount manganui, Amazing tourist Attractions like the waihi gold mine and the aMAZEme maze in rotorua and also it has great fishing locations and much much more. we love rugby and lots of other sports in the bay of plenty we have the biggest school too in The Bay Of Plenty it has over 1200 kids isn't that amazing. = = = =in the bay we have lots of lovely views including at the top of mount manganui it has a heck of a view and its main beach is spectacular just like the town. The beaches in the bay of pleanty are great it has normal waves not big or small the sand is nice and the people are very friendly. There are lots of Tourist attractions in the bay of plenty like for instance the waihi gold mine. The waihi gold mine is another amazing place. Did you know that when the cant find anymore gold or silver they will fill it with water and make it al lake? if you like big schools then come to the bay and see tauranga intermediate it is the biggest school in new zealand. I’m serious its got over 1200 kids like seriously thats a lot of kids. = = = =So come down to the bay of pleanty people and see the mount in tauranga and see the waihi gold mine in rotorua and the biggest school in New Zealand in tauranga. So don't miss out and come here for your holiday where its cheap and not expensive. Now come down and enjoy the nice sea breeze and the nice views from high locations in the Bay Of Pleanty. =

Fantastic introduction Quinn, it states your 3 main reasons, includes a rhetorical question and is well written. Unfortunately this doesn't follow through into the rest of your writing! You need to include a separate paragraph for all of your 3 ideas - not put them into the same one. You need to also include more detail about your ideas. Remember SEE. Your conclusion is also superb and restates your ideas. Lovely language used, with some strong imperatives and personal pronouns. You now need to focus on including detail in your main ideas to extend the body of your argument. You are making excellent progress and will succeed with your writing if you do this. Miss Crone :)

﻿**__Thursday 14th April 2011__**

**L.I. We are learning to develop effective questions and draw conclusions from our findings.** __S.C. We will have__


 * used a variety of questions from the 7 servants
 * used a variety of open and closed questions to extract relevant information

WHY KIWIS ARE THE BEST!

=Kiwis are the best because kiwis make the best rugby team in the world they are called the All Blacks and there are lots more rugby teams too but it will take a long time to tell you all of them. Kiwis are the best they have made heaps of tourist attractions like amazeme in rotorua its a big circle maze and its so hard to get through and another one is kiwi 360 it is a giant kiwifruit that you can walk in and up two the top. kiwis are the best because we are named after an animal called the kiwi its a little flightless bird and a fruit is called after the kiwi too like the kiwifruit the kiwi is very popular because it is only in our country. Our national symbol for New Zealand is the silver fern and our netball team is named after that two. And that is why kiwis are the best and i mean the human kiwis.=